1. Voice -5
The strongest area of this students writing was voice. We decided to give him a grade of 5 because he showed definite conviction and brought the subject to life. His disappointment over the trip being cancelled was apparent throughout the letter. He showed strong feeling in regard to this by saying "I think it's unfear (unfair) what your (you're) doing to the St. Teresa's School grade 6 class in French Emersion," and "were (where) is the money going to go not for the next years fund I hope." These statements, as well as "Nope can't go" show definite engagement with the topic and strong feelings about it. Every sentence is directed towards expressing his disapproval.
2. Organization -4
In the area of organization we gave
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